Poetry requires young minds. Revised

Wilfred Owen

Broken bodies of boys torn apart by bombs

Seigfried Sassoon

With embarrassment I realised a Dizain has to have rhyming lines according to the pattern ababbccdcd.

I have learned a lesson to read, revise, and wait before posting.

Here is a newer version.

Broken bodies of boys torn apart by enemy

Fire – for King and Country on foreign soil.

Left Eucalyptus air. In their dichotomy

The troops grieving mothers torn, as land-holds boil.

Remember the fallen in ANZAC Day turmoil

Dicky, my school head master placed faith in

Warring soldier poets Sassoon and Owen,

Military men, saw brutality

In Somme and Flanders sodden trenches. Even

Daws understood poetry requires affinity

When he retired Daws lamented he left writing poetry, something he loved to do, much too long. I am now well past the age he was when he made this lament. Like him I find interesting words much harder to recall. Once again I am having difficulty with spelling and I find predictive text demands another level of concentration. Too frequently I will type something, keep typing, and look to see what I have before me is not what I had written.

Anyway, this Dizain poem has illustrations taken from the Australian War Museum site.

Once again, thank you for reading my efforts.

You know poetry. Please teach me by telling me where I can improve.

Christmas Dizain

Christmas is family time at our place

The children are in anticipation

Their stockings filled with gifts of tinselled grace

Will bring them treasured tokens to keep in speculation

And hold them very busy for their vocation

When school resumes and holidays are over

They will be ready to tell of the favour

To classmates agog how with the Yule gift

Their summer hols flew by without labour

And next year with luck, and good planing, regift.

dizain 10 lines of ten syllables


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Tinsel Illustration

Thank you for your visit. In my haste to finish I may have miscounted the syllables. Please feel free to suggest improvements.